Sunday, October 5, 2008

First frost--
The young man's voice cracks
For the first time

6 comments:

Winter Moth said...

Something we all can relate to! :)

Nora said...

You're right. Even my voice broke and deepened a bit during puberty. Thanks, winter moth!

John McDonald said...

love it
john

Nora said...

Many warm thanks, John.

Alan Summers said...

Sublime.

I don't think you need all those upper case, it's distracting from a very fine haiku.


first frost--
the young man's voice cracks
for the first time


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I love the way you have combined sound in this haiku. It's rarely done, and this is really one of the best examples of using sound with juxtaposing images I've ever read.

Nora said...

Ah, Alan. Thanks for your helpful and kind feedback.