Sunday, October 26, 2008

forest path -
rustle of leaves
in my trail

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chemin de sous-bois -
le bruissement des feuilles
dans mon sillage

5 comments:

Nora said...

I love it, Damien!

Poet in Residence said...

think you could replace 'sound' to advantage

Damien Gabriels said...

thank you for your comment : you're right about "sound"
What do you think of "rustle" ?

Poet in Residence said...

'rustle'
autumnal, even a little sinister
like it

Damien Gabriels said...

OK, so I change my post.
Many thanks for your help