Monday, September 15, 2008



after the rain

huge mushrooms dot the lawn

4 comments:

Area 17 said...

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I really like this!

Because I really like it, I wonder if you could give it some more space.

I often admire your haiku but want it framed more by space, away from other text.

Sorry to sound brutal, but it's only because I'm a fan of your work! ;-)

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David said...

there is a problem with 'huge' and 'dot'.

I suggest you could drop the 'huge'and or add 'scatter' instead of 'dot'

but i think

'after rain
mushrooms dot the lawn'

is a good line

Anonymous said...

dot the lawn... very nice. :)

Reihaisha said...

Gentlemen,
I was able to get a picture from my commute that inspired the moment

:D enjoy
reihaisha