tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7798578235216605531.post6488979614552244689..comments2023-07-25T01:00:42.700-07:00Comments on Autumn Haiku 2008: Stevehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16394056957171485464noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7798578235216605531.post-31709678316233969162008-09-17T09:34:00.000-07:002008-09-17T09:34:00.000-07:00Gentlemen,I was able to get a picture from my comm...Gentlemen,<BR/>I was able to get a picture from my commute that inspired the moment<BR/><BR/>:D enjoy<BR/>reihaishaReihaishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08867022601906005422noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7798578235216605531.post-32575539534287974112008-09-16T00:16:00.000-07:002008-09-16T00:16:00.000-07:00dot the lawn... very nice. :)dot the lawn... very nice. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7798578235216605531.post-68311965119080067692008-09-15T23:43:00.000-07:002008-09-15T23:43:00.000-07:00there is a problem with 'huge' and 'dot'.I suggest...there is a problem with 'huge' and 'dot'.<BR/><BR/>I suggest you could drop the 'huge'and or add 'scatter' instead of 'dot' <BR/><BR/>but i think<BR/><BR/>'after rain<BR/>mushrooms dot the lawn'<BR/><BR/>is a good lineDavidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14343643387576533616noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7798578235216605531.post-91552727009356626072008-09-15T14:19:00.000-07:002008-09-15T14:19:00.000-07:00.I really like this!Because I really like it, I wo....<BR/>I really like this!<BR/><BR/>Because I really like it, I wonder if you could give it some more space.<BR/><BR/>I often admire your haiku but want it framed more by space, away from other text.<BR/><BR/>Sorry to sound brutal, but it's only because I'm a fan of your work! ;-)<BR/><BR/>.Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.com