Very nice ;)
"whirring" is a difficult word - I expect you wanted the association with engine but it does not fit here. I don't think alliteration works in haiku.sorry to be negativeD
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Very nice ;)
"whirring" is a difficult word - I expect you wanted the association with engine but it does not fit here.
I don't think alliteration works in haiku.
sorry to be negative
D
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